Published April 7, 2005
me i am bullied
me i am sad
me i am scared
me i am mad
me i am happy
me i am prone to b very emotional
when iam alone
me i am interesting
me i am shy
me i am lonely
when others pass by
me i am individual
i like all of my own things
im into lots of different things
like spirits and good luck rings
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The lack of capitals kinda deterred from the whole poem. It was all right, I suppose...just didn't really do anything for me.
This isn't that bad, the rhyming is alright. But I suggest you work on it a bit. A little touch up on the grammer wouldn't hurt.
Keep working on it and you'll get it.
I didn't really like this one. It was pkay, yeah, there's nothing much wrong with it, it just doesn't appeal to me. I got the theme you were going for, the simplicity and the girl being a little confused. However, the emotions in the poem were a little mixed up, and the rythym was a little off balance.
Didn't really fit in, and i don't know wether "b" is a typo or not, but if it isn't I'd change it to "be".
If you want to keep no punctuation that's fine, poets are allowed to do that, so don't stress over it. Keep working, you'll improve really soon. This site has helped me lots.
I thought this was good but it was a little repetative(sorry but I just want to tell you)
And I think you should capitalize your "I"s. It would look more like a poem.
Apart from that, I enjoyed reading this. Keep Writing!
~Lollipop~